red handed

Getting caught red handed is one of the most awkward situations that
most of us feel ashamed after(ww.-about) and its very hard to forget(phr.-can't forget).I want(ww.would like) to tell you about one time that I got caught and I’ll(gr.-would) never forget.

It was in the fourth grade and I(מיותר) back than (I) had a teacher named Mally.
Mally had given lots of home work which I rarely did. Therefore, Mally asked me to ask my mother to sign in my notebook that she knows(gr.) that I haven’t(gr.) been doing my homework. I didn’t want my mother to know, so instead, I signed my brother. The following day, I showed the signature to my teacher and she was pleased. But after the lesson, she was surprised to find out that I haven’t(gr.) made(ww.) homework …again(surprising isn’t it ?) .

In(ww.) that day my mother forgot her keys and went to school to take my keys. Mally saw my mother and wanted to speak with her, (New sentence) she asked my mother: “why didn’t  Perry make homework again, even after you signed that you knew about it”. My mother didn’t know what Mally was talking about. I was in panic and I didn’t know what to do, so I tried tricking my mother's memory saying: “mother, don’t you remember that you signed on it (ww.- in my notebook) yesterday ?!” thinking that she is(gr.) old and she might “buy” it, but she did not… (Something is missing here. What happened when after that...?)

I felt so ashamed and stupid that I tried to lie and I promised to my self since that day that I would always do my homework.
This is better.
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Daphna

Letter To The Editor

4 Hatzfira
Holon, Israel
68972
September 4, 2013

The editor
"Haaretz"
21 Zalman Shoken
Tel Aviv, Israel
66532

Dear editor,


Last week you published an article about meizav tests, saying they should be canceled.
In my opinion, standardized tests are an important tool.

In the article Yair Lapid said that standardized tests don’t measure intelligence and I agree with that. However, the thing that they do measure and is not less important, is the efforts of the students to succeed. Most of the times students who work hard and do their best,  succeed and have higher grades, and that thing(מיותר) in my opinion is the most important thing to measure.  It says(ww.) that the person who did the standardized test and succeeded in them is diligent and a hard worker that would do his best in everthing in life.

Standardized tests give to students hard time(phr.), teachers and schools who don’t succeed in them(This sentence is incomplete), (Start a new sentence) therefore, the results should stay in the hands of (the) ministry (of) education that should use it to improve and support the less successful schools and students, and by that improve the education system and use those tests in a beneficial way. I Hope you got my point of view.

Sincerely yours,

Danny Cohen 

This is much better. Well done.
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Daphna